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Hi Keizer, what a great story! You have used each of the words shown and created an enjoyable story. Keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteMrs T
Teleported while on someone else's bicycle. I would not want to own the bike he teleported on.
ReplyDeleteWell done Khizer
Mr G
Hey Khizer - I hope that wasn't one of my bicycles that Ben stole . . . I'm heading out to my bike sheds to check that they are all there!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your fast-paced story where you worked the nine words in well. I also like the short but imaginative sentence you used; "Ben barely escaped." - this built up a really good picture in my mind what was happening and gave your story impact. That is the skill of a good author so well done Khizer. tino pai!
Did it take you long to plan and write your story?
Have a great day.
Mr W.
Hi Khizer
ReplyDeleteGood job using all the words, I love that you highlighted them to make it easier for me to see. Your story kept me in suspense. The whole time I was reading it I wondered what on earth was going to happen next. You used lots of great descriptive language which helped build a good picture in my mind with what is happening. I wonder what type of cookies and donuts were bought at the supermarket, What are your favourite?
From Petra
Hi Khizer
ReplyDeleteWhat a great, interesting story you've written there . Well done, loved how you used lots of your imagination here. It got me thinking of where I'd like to teleport to, if I got
the chance. I'm still thinking about it.............
Where would you like to teleport to?
Anna