One cold night in a Cookie Time cookie shop, a mist was hanging over so thick you could barely see. Suddenly, there was a bang. Everybody turned and looked at the source of the noise, there was an axe sticking through one of the windows.
Everybody screamed, and cookies were sent flying in all directions. Then, faceless people started smashing through the door, using some kind of magic to turn people into rats. People (the ones who made an escape) reported this to the police, but they just said it was ridiculous.
Several more people were turned into rats that night, including a duckling. One man swore he saw one of the faceless people teleport, but the stupid police did nothing! They just stood around eating doughnuts!
Later, a policeman’s clothes were found on a bicycle with a rat inside them. One man was a rat, covered from head to toe in chicken feathers. One lady said she saw a faceless person on a skateboard. Then one of them was caught by the police and jailed.
Over the next few days, more people were turned into rodents. There were 15 conversions in total. Then a group of the faceless people were found in Bell Tower, turns out they were just the scouts! There were dozens more to come! But, we found their weakness, fire!
People bought flame throwers, fire cannons, fiery missiles and lots more fire related weapons. Soon, all the faceless scouts were captured, back in Bell Tower the police found the entrance was actually on the same street the man who thought they’d teleported lived on. He was right!
They skated on skateboards to Bell Tower, the lady was right too! They found a cage filled with chicken feathers as well.
Anyway, they circled the entrance to the faceless people with fire. Everybody stood around that circle with their fire weapons loaded. Then, there was a POP, everybody fired and they found a pile of smouldering ashes. The ashes were melted and made into toilet paper!
THE END!
Everybody screamed, and cookies were sent flying in all directions. Then, faceless people started smashing through the door, using some kind of magic to turn people into rats. People (the ones who made an escape) reported this to the police, but they just said it was ridiculous.
Several more people were turned into rats that night, including a duckling. One man swore he saw one of the faceless people teleport, but the stupid police did nothing! They just stood around eating doughnuts!
Later, a policeman’s clothes were found on a bicycle with a rat inside them. One man was a rat, covered from head to toe in chicken feathers. One lady said she saw a faceless person on a skateboard. Then one of them was caught by the police and jailed.
Over the next few days, more people were turned into rodents. There were 15 conversions in total. Then a group of the faceless people were found in Bell Tower, turns out they were just the scouts! There were dozens more to come! But, we found their weakness, fire!
People bought flame throwers, fire cannons, fiery missiles and lots more fire related weapons. Soon, all the faceless scouts were captured, back in Bell Tower the police found the entrance was actually on the same street the man who thought they’d teleported lived on. He was right!
They skated on skateboards to Bell Tower, the lady was right too! They found a cage filled with chicken feathers as well.
Anyway, they circled the entrance to the faceless people with fire. Everybody stood around that circle with their fire weapons loaded. Then, there was a POP, everybody fired and they found a pile of smouldering ashes. The ashes were melted and made into toilet paper!
THE END!
Fantastic story Jacob. Fantastic job on using all 9 words.
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Mr G
Hi Jacob, What an amazing story! I enjoyed reading it, so much suspense. You did well including all the 9 words.
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Mrs Walker
Hi Jacob
ReplyDeleteWhat a cool story, it really kept me entertained and was wondering what was going to happen next. Well done!
Anna
Hi Jacob
ReplyDeleteFantastic story, you really kept me in suspense all the way through. Yes, you did use all the words too. I loved how I could picture what was happening in my head. Great job Jacob.
From Petra
Hi Jacob,
ReplyDeleteYour opening paragraph hooked me in straight away and I felt compelled to continue reading, eager to find out what was happening. Immediately you had started creating images in my head as I was piecing together each bit of information. How could i not become engrossed when you've written lines like; ". . .a mist was hanging over so thick you could barely see." and, "Everybody turned and looked at the source of the noise, . . ."
Snaring the reader, reeling them in and forcing them to read more is the skill of a very good author and you certainly managed to do that Jacob, in bucket loads! Tino pai! I loved it.
Keep up the great work. and have an awesome afternoon.
Mr W.