Mr G's Story. How they caught Mr Wolf:

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 Hi Guys

Thanks for sharing your ideas with me today in our Google Meet. I have finished my story of how they caught Mr Wolf.

I would really like some Feedback on my writing. 

Remember look deeper into my story. 

Does it make sense? 

Is it interesting? 

Is the ending complete? 

Is there more I could add?



Comments

  1. Austin :)September 1, 2021 at 6:28 PM

    Very interesting story Mr G, but I saw something. In your 2nd paragraph it says office Gibson instead of officer Gibson. Apart from that your story is very cool.
    Austin :)

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    1. Marc GibsonSeptember 1, 2021 at 6:37 PM

      Thanks Austin. What do you think about the ending? Do you want to know more about how they caught the wolf?

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  2. PetraSeptember 1, 2021 at 7:44 PM

    Hi Mr G
    I love your story because I have a main part in it. I like the idea of being a Super Commander. I'm not quite sure how the wolf was caught though? Was it me that caught him or was it one of my staff, Officer Gibson or Super Officer Anna?
    Petra

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  3. Mrs TabakSeptember 2, 2021 at 10:17 AM

    What an awesome story Mr G. Your story is in sequence and makes sense and I can visualize what is going on. Maybe your story could have more of a dramatic ending like your officers chasing the wolf around before they caught him. I also love the names you have given the pigs.
    Great story Mr G!
    Mrs T

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